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Feasts and Fables's avatar

Dark, nicely done. Shivers down the spine as her purpose unfolds. Really enjoyed the chills you summon up!

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Aubrey Perry's avatar

Oh thank you! So glad you enjoyed the story and the rise in tension. I do seem to have some sort of fixation with existential purpose and if a being's nature is "overridable" or self-determining. Anyway, that you again.

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Feasts and Fables's avatar

There’ll be plenty more stories to be mined from that theme. I get drawn into the darker corners of my characters’ natures. A rich vein.

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Bill Adler's avatar

I love Unforgiven. It's eerie and gives me chills, and the ending leaves room for my certain nightmare tonight to fill in the blanks. It's marvelously written.

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Aubrey Perry's avatar

Thank you, Bill. How lovely to receive such a comment from someone whose writing I admire so much. And I’m glad it lingered with you for a bit. That’s the best when a creepy story follows you around for while after you’ve finished reading it. I’ll keep my eye out for your next one.

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Micheal A Edwards's avatar

Gosh it must be so hard to fit all of what you are trying to convey into such a short space, nice work

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Aubrey Perry's avatar

Thanks Micheal! The word constraint is tough, but I enjoy the challenge and think the more concise a writer can be (sometimes), the more tension there is, or can be. I hope you think I captured enough to develop a complete narrative. I think it’s pretty clear what will happen to the family from that point on, so it seemed the right place to end.

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Jayne's avatar

I love this!!

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Aubrey Perry's avatar

Do you?! I'm so glad! It was fun to write from this perspective! Thank you for reading.

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